It started at around 9:30 when. I was still hungry from my mums yucky dinner. So I went to the fridge to get something eat. When I opened the old fridge my dad had bought five years ago. I saw nothing that tasted good. So I went to the cupboard and opened. In the back of the cupboard I saw something shinny. Once I grabbed the shinny object. I immediately opened it. It contained a small lolly so I ate it. It made my tongue tingle.
Last night was very very strange. Let me tell you about it
It started at around 9:30 when. I was still hungry from my mums yucky dinner. So I went to the fridge to get something eat. When I opened the old fridge my dad had bought five years ago. I saw nothing that tasted good. So I went to the cupboard and opened. In the back of the cupboard I saw something shinny. Once I grabbed the shinny object. I immediately opened it. It contained a small lolly so I ate it. It made my tongue tingle.
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Oskar
6/2/2015 12:37:34 pm
Good work Amber. There was one incorrect placement with your story. Still a good peice of writing. Great work
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Ella D
6/24/2015 10:00:53 am
I like your style of writting, there is one mistake. I like how you say in the story that the fridge is five years old!
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