"um i um..." i don't know what to say now. i hope this ends better. so as she opens the jar the... the report isn't there.
I knew i was gonna get caught. My mum offered us cookies and of course my sister said yes. Now i'm guessing your thinking why is that bad? well because i'm hiding my bad school report in the jar with the cookies. so that's a problem. And i do something even more stupid by saying "cookies are dumb lets have something more healthy like veggies." But my mum says " OK i'll cut you up some carrot"
"um i um..." i don't know what to say now. i hope this ends better. so as she opens the jar the... the report isn't there.
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Miss Fay
5/25/2015 08:19:47 pm
Very humerous Darcy. Your first sentence acts as a fabulous hook. It grabs the reader right from the beginning. Be sure to check you work for capital letters before posting.
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Imogen
5/28/2015 08:07:09 am
Well done darcy. Your plan has worked and Your mum didn't find the report. Next time just check your work. Very funny
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chris
5/31/2015 04:31:45 pm
Ha Ha! Nice job i always love your storys!
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sylvia
5/31/2015 05:52:18 pm
Well done Darcy. I found your piece of writing highly amusing, and kept me sitting on the edge of my seat. I think it was very clever. There was just a few grammar mistakes such as none capital I's. Keep up the good work though.
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Xavier
6/3/2015 03:48:57 pm
Hey Darcy, I love all your work and find this one probably my favourite one so far. Just remember to put capital 'i' 's but otherwise keep it up!
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