A friend and i were looking in the back of the garage where no one dares to go. We planned to make the next big invention. We have found nothing but junk so we were sort of doing some cleaning for my dad and I decided to look in the old shed. I found myself in front of a enormous box. I was to scared to open it but my friend just had to open it. so as she lifted the lid there was a pipe, one boring pipe. It looks like we aren't the best inventors. There's not much you can invent with a pipe.
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Miss Fay
5/27/2015 09:38:47 pm
Imogen, your piece made me laugh out loud. Very funny.
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Sasa
5/27/2015 11:01:39 pm
Wow Imi,
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Imogen
5/28/2015 07:59:45 am
Thank you Miss Fay and Sarah for your feedback.
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rubi
5/28/2015 04:17:18 pm
Well done Imi, i really liked how you found a pipe, a boring old pipe. Keep up the good work
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Audrey
5/28/2015 04:21:23 pm
Well done Imi, that was a fabulous piece of writing. There were a few mistakes but it still sounded great. I like how you used so many descriptive words. Keep up the great work!
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Fred
6/3/2015 06:06:43 pm
Hello Imogen. What a lovely story... Very amusing with an unexpected ending. You've missed a couple of errors - i instead of I, to instead of too. Otherwise, this is an impressive piece of writing. Well done!
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scarlett
6/5/2015 03:50:19 pm
Great piece of writing Imi,
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Megan
7/7/2015 07:16:45 pm
WELLDONE! Brilliant story! I can't wait to see what you will write next. You did it wonderfully and I could just imagine it in my head. I love your opening sentence.
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