I wake up to see it's only half as bad as it should be. I stand up and see that i've fallen and hurt myself but I'm going up. I don't know where but it'll be hard to get past
I tried to push past it but the ferocious wind was to much and I gave in. I'm faling until I hit the bottom I open my eyes as i'm being pulled over of the cliff. I'm trying to stay down and climb the air up onto the rock and jump up to only fall off to the only place...down.
I wake up to see it's only half as bad as it should be. I stand up and see that i've fallen and hurt myself but I'm going up. I don't know where but it'll be hard to get past
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Deniz
5/19/2015 06:01:33 pm
Hi Xavier I really enjoyed reading your text I love how you said 'I gave in' and I loved the imagination and creativity you put in it.Next time try double checking or ask one of your family members to help you with the punctuation and spelling.Other than that I think that piece was amazing Well done!
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Miss Fay
5/19/2015 07:12:51 pm
Deniz, this is a really encouraging and constructive comment. Well done for providing useful feedback to your peers!
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Miss Fay
5/19/2015 07:20:19 pm
Well done for entering this week's 100WC Xavier!
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