The rain was pounding against the ground and the wind was like no other it was ferocious. It looked like it would never stop and the city would drown. But the ferocious wind was hope as it would drive away the walls of water and all would be free again. Until then the night will be long and it will never let me sleep so I sing to my self through the night ahead. But the storm it will hold in our memories for evermore and rise again so I sing my self to sleep through the long, long night.
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Loretta Leary (Tem 100WC Melbourne Australia)
5/23/2015 12:29:24 pm
This is a very descriptive story Sarah. Well done. Try not to start sentences with conjunctions such as but or and. Also another good tip is to read your work aloud so that you can hear where you need to add some punctuation. Great job.
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Madeleine
5/25/2015 05:36:24 pm
Great story! Very creative and descriptive for only 100 words! And yes as Loretta said try not to use conjunctions to start sentences.
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Genevieve
5/27/2015 03:41:21 pm
That was a great story sarah very creative and descriptive :)
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Tia
5/27/2015 07:26:40 pm
I liked how you used lots of adjectives and how you described the setting!
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