A loud knock on the door made the whole house and everyone inside shiver. When Maya peered outside into the night with her piercing, questioning eyes, a dark mysterious man handed her a plain, old, boring box. In her arms, it felt heavy and alive. She slammed the door shut in the strangers face and raced inside to open the box. Her heart pounded like the beat of a drum. Warning bells told her to return the box but she couldn't resist taking a peek. Very, very, very slowly she lifted the lid to find to find the most adorable puppy in the world, fast asleep.
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Helen Briscoe (Team100WC)
5/30/2015 07:38:43 pm
I really enjoyed this 100WC. You have managed to create an atmosphere of suspense with a fantastic use of vocabulary. Great writing - well done!
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Sophia.foster1
5/31/2015 05:38:07 pm
Your piece of writing was amazing!!! Your words were so strong and I could see the story in my head. Keep up the great work! :)
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Madeleine
6/8/2015 05:55:25 pm
Very interesting, and good use of words for this piece of text I very much enjoyed it.
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